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Laura E.
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PostSubject: The Battle   Tue Feb 16, 2016 3:13 pm

There's a battle that's raging inside of me and I don't know what to do
Its been waged by our worst enemy
Trying to steal me away from You.
I'm getting tired and worn and beaten down
I can't do this on my own
I need to hear You tell me
That I'm not fighting alone

On my own I don't have strength enough
To resist the traps and snares
That the enemy puts out for me
And I'm feeling really scared.
I don't want him to win this fight
I want to stay with You
So please hold me up
And give me the courage to stay true.

I surrender here and now
You can have control
Of the vicious battle going on
Deep within my soul.
Let me hear you clearly
As You stand here at my side
Telling me "Don't worry, my child,
I'll always help you fight."
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PostSubject: Re: The Battle   Wed Feb 17, 2016 12:52 am

Hey, if anyone thinks this poem needs any changes or has any tips on making it better, or has any advice on becoming a better writer in general, I would be very grateful. I'm always open to any and all suggestions. I want to use the talents God gave me to the best of my ability, so it would be great to have more experienced writers share thier opinions and advice.
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PostSubject: Re: The Battle   Wed Feb 17, 2016 9:58 am

Who are you writing for? Let that be your focus...to hell with critiques and opinions...if it is "Given" then it is "all good". God is the "giver" of all good things,welcome to C.C.W. Laura. As your listening and heeding increase so to will your writing, obedience is the most important discipline and key. Love ya'!

P.S., I like mushrooms and sausage on my pizza, most everyone loves pizza...who doesn't?
Maybe you like a different combination of topping, it's all subjective isn't it?

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PostSubject: Re: The Battle   Wed Feb 17, 2016 10:48 am

Thanks. I guess that, while I appreciate others' opinions, really the only one that matters is God's. I'm writing for Him. I didn't really think of that before. Thanks for pointing it out!

Oh, yeah, I like mushrooms and sausage on my pizza too!
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PostSubject: Re: The Battle   Wed Feb 17, 2016 10:50 am

Tomorrow I might like peppers and onions but I will always love pizza and I will always love Christ, who "loved us first" :)


We must take all of our "so called" failures to God, seek our guidance from him first and foremost.
Consider the following link from a shared blog "Salvoesinfaith":

https://salvoesinfaith.wordpress.com/2014/03/04/parable-of-a-man-and-the-immovable-rock-love-this-story/

A quote from this of some remarkable significance.
"Feeling like a failure, the man decided maybe that’s what he should do. However, he thought that since God had asked him to do this task, he would take his failure to God and see what God wanted him to do."

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PostSubject: Re: The Battle   Wed Feb 17, 2016 8:10 pm

Wow! Absolutely love that story! Its so powerful, and very true. God asks us to do something specific, but doesn't always tell us we will succeed or not. I'm going to keep on writing for him and sharing it with others and to heck with what the world thinks! Maybe I don't think that I'm that great at writing, but God can be using that to make me stronger.
I hope that makes sense.
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PostSubject: Re: The Battle   Wed Feb 17, 2016 9:21 pm

Makes a lot of sense, but that's just my opinion.
Here' another story you might like, another favorite!
https://salvoesinfaith.wordpress.com/?s=the+cracked+and+leaking+pot
I'll keep em' comin' till you cry uncle...lol!

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PostSubject: Re: The Battle   Wed Feb 17, 2016 10:05 pm

Go right ahead and keep 'em coming! I'm not crying uncle for a long time...lol! I can always use stories that encourage me and keep me growing in my walk with God. I have heard the story of the pot several times but its one of my absolute favourites. Love it!!!!!! :)
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PostSubject: Re: The Battle   Wed Feb 17, 2016 10:08 pm

BTW, I just took a leap of faith and posted a short story under the fiction short stories. Took me a year to fine tune it, but I'm not stressing over it anymore. It may have flaws in it or not....who cares? I did my best!! That's all God cares about!
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PostSubject: Re: The Battle   Wed Feb 17, 2016 10:16 pm


I'm listening to this right now...love it!

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PostSubject: Re: The Battle   Wed Feb 17, 2016 11:31 pm

Yeah, its a really powerful song. I like it too. Its so moving!
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PostSubject: Re: The Battle   Mon Mar 21, 2016 7:05 pm

You received some great Valentines gifts from the maestro OEW. He would not invest had he not seen a well disked field of faith. Poetry means you get to choose the topic cadence format and purpose. Take a gander over at Stuff That Rhymes (google search).

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PostSubject: Re: The Battle   Tue Mar 22, 2016 10:43 am

Tip o' d' iceberg Forrester.. P.M. this young lady introduce yer'self and say hi.
She is a joy to speak with and very real!

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