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PostSubject: Intimate conversation (something's missing)   Sun May 19, 2013 9:13 pm




Renegade with a heart?
At the end of the line,
a new start?
You don't make sense to my senses
nothing invested, yet countless recompenses
eres' turn to hences, arthritic legs jumping fences
in the service of lengthy sentences

Confused but not beyond belief
belief is all i have that counts one iota
dressing wounds with it like a salve
failing this here and now perpetually
taking what You send too casually
defense mechanisms in layers dissolving
breaking down the broken, then breaking that down more
demolishing all that stands between 'eye' and You
what would You have me do?
i wait and wait for You
no sooner do i begin to feel like i've faded from Your view
the world pulls me down with crushing, joint grinding, gravity
then You remind me, everything You said was True

In this filthy shell,
how do You tolerate my smell?
"unfit to untie Your sandals"
and was he not the greatest among these?
then what of the likes of me?
and these tears...
please tell me someday...
You know everything,
what are they for?
i'm hurting and I don't know why,
i love You like i do,
it is a mystery of Word and Spirit,
and all my many words,
no matter how I arrange them...

seem to know any more than i do,
but they don't speak to me,
as they pass...
through me
wringing tears from out of my mind
and the salt...
stinging my heart


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PostSubject: Re: Intimate conversation (something's missing)   Sun May 19, 2013 11:37 pm

Perfect ending to an exceptional middle and an amazing beginning. Absolutely. Always, in all ways. Peace

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PostSubject: Re: Intimate conversation (something's missing)   Mon May 20, 2013 9:22 am

Grabbing poem! Our tears at the thought of Jesus are a strange confluence of joy and sorrow, shame and hope, brevity and eternity. Thanks AG. And your tears are manly.
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PostSubject: Re: Intimate conversation (something's missing)   Sat May 25, 2013 9:50 am

This brings brand new tears to my eyes no matter how many times I read it...almost afraid to now. It feels like intruding in someone else's intimate spaces.
Thanks for reading!

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PostSubject: Re: Intimate conversation (something's missing)   Tue Jun 27, 2017 6:13 pm

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