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 A Solitary Olive Tree

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PostSubject: A Solitary Olive Tree   Mon Jan 21, 2013 11:12 pm

There was a solitary olive tree
In a field standing,
Caught about by mighty winds,
It’s leaves and branches dancing.

Ever-green and Evanescent,
Endless in its motion,
Despite the desolation all around,
The wind-struck land erosion.

A foxtrot fueled by furious breeze,
Love-struck and dazed the olive tree lay,
That the wind who knows no distant end,
Nor rest would lead it in divine ballet.

In the carnal dust around the tree
Consumed by communion,
A cordial truth; the wind’s presence,
A redeeming conclusion.
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PostSubject: Re: A Solitary Olive Tree   Thu Jan 31, 2013 4:18 am

Love the alliteration, assonance, and consonance along with a stirring message. It rolls off the tongue very nicely. Excellent!

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PostSubject: Re: A Solitary Olive Tree   Thu Jan 31, 2013 1:29 pm

Amazingly beautiful poem. No doubt.

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PostSubject: Re: A Solitary Olive Tree   Thu Jan 31, 2013 2:16 pm

Beautiful!

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