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PostSubject: The world is a cemetery   Fri Oct 26, 2012 12:56 pm


The world is a cemetery, bury me now
Weary is the missionary, bury me now
Let my life be my obituary, bury me now
BURY ME NOW!!!...BURY ME NOW!!!...

I'm walking dead, I'm talking dead
I've got dead man's thoughts running through my head
I see signs of life, I catch a glimmer of hope
and they're swinging back and forth from the end of a rope
I look at the world and watch the world look back
with chaos, destruction, temptation and black
I look to the past and I see nothing but death
I stare into the future and I catch my final breath
I hold it there, in the palm of my hand
and as it starts to grow cold I begin to understand
that the longer I live, the slower I die
and my life flashes by within these tears I cry

The world is a cemetery, bury me now
Slay the revolutionary, bury me now
Let my life be my obituary, bury me now
BURY ME NOW!!!...BURY ME NOW!!!...

I keep the faith that my faith stays strong
because faith is the only thing that gets me along
Faith in the coming, faith in the light
Faith to keep me safe from the darkness of the night
The shadows have eyes, they have evil little grins
and from the moment I awake...that's when the darkness begins
There is just enough sunlight to find my way
Day becomes night time...night becomes day
Faith gives me sight, and sight sets me free
Vision far beyond what my eyes can see
I hear a whisper in my head that I'm better off dead
just as the guillotine stings...and it colors me red

The world is a cemetery, bury me now
Welcome is the mercenary, bury me now
Let my life be my obituary, bury me now
BURY ME NOW!!!...BURY ME NOW!!!...

Death songs I sing let freedom ring
and it's to this freedom that I cling
Free to be free in a world gone mad
Free to be me when me is all that I had
When everybody left me standing all alone
The forgotten man...I am the great unknown
and now I know where I want to go
Let death come quickly...let the poison slowly flow
The poison of the world as I leave it behind
for it poisoned my heart, my soul and my mind
and as I step into my grave, stay brave little dove
for I escape a world of hate...and embrace a greater love

I have a vision of division as I strive to arrive
where the living live dead and the dead are alive
I long to be free as I'm preparing to die
so bury me now upon my final goodbye...

BURY ME NOW!!!...BURY ME NOW!!!...BURY...ME...NOOOOOOOOWWWWWWW!!!

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PostSubject: Re: The world is a cemetery   Fri Oct 26, 2012 3:28 pm

i really liked reading this outloud, great flow, great rhythm...thoroughly enjoyed it!!
Got a bit hoarse from reading it, especially the end!!

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PostSubject: Re: The world is a cemetery   Fri Oct 26, 2012 4:06 pm

Right on. This is the song I wrote for my son last night. Well, the lyrics to the song, anyway. He's gonna have to do the hard part by actually writing the music around the lyrics, which is opposite of how most people write songs, apparently. I have nothing but confidence in him, though. I went to try and call you back, but my phone died and my charger mysteriously has disappeared, which generally means one of my little ones lost it. Booooo..... Much love, brotha. Always, in all ways. Word.

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PostSubject: Re: The world is a cemetery   Fri Oct 26, 2012 5:05 pm

this is so good! i'm a "hardcore" person if you will, and its heavy and raw....love it!
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PostSubject: Re: The world is a cemetery   Fri Oct 26, 2012 8:54 pm

You go rhyma. I hope we get to hear the final version.
I Love the whole thing but this line particularly stood out:

where the living live dead and the dead are alive

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PostSubject: Re: The world is a cemetery   Sat Oct 27, 2012 6:42 pm

Well, hopefully it does come out hard and edgy, something kinda like P.O.D., which is my favorite heavy Christian band. Well, as heavy as I listen to, anyway. And when it gets fully produced, Miss Lora, I will absolutely put it up here. This is my first attempt at an actual song, and whereas it took ten minutes to write the lyrics, it may take ten months to do all the rest of the stuff. I have no clue. My son is pretty crafty, though.

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PostSubject: Re: The world is a cemetery   Sat Oct 27, 2012 7:08 pm

I love P.O.D.!

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PostSubject: Re: The world is a cemetery   Mon Nov 05, 2012 10:43 pm

Everything, Life...is a game. If you are having fun you are winning. Find amusement in everything and you will see. Nature, emotions, challenges etc, are all toys for the human being. It is unfortunate that everything material is placed in front of our faces. Never trust anything perishable, all THINGS made by man are perishable. This is a hard concept to grasp considering the bible and the church are manmade. Sifting out distractions and false or tampered beliefs can be acknowledged through conscience (the holy spirit). If it makes you feel bad, it isn't right, even if you were raised to trust it with all your might. Remember where society, civilization, and social norms came from. The kingdom is inside of you.
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PostSubject: Re: The world is a cemetery   Fri Nov 30, 2012 9:50 pm

This one is definitely worth a second, third, fourth... read.

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PostSubject: Re: The world is a cemetery   Sat Dec 01, 2012 8:23 am

Could not agree more...maybe we could perhaps pin it?

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PostSubject: Re: The world is a cemetery   Sat Dec 01, 2012 3:42 pm

By all means, feel free to. Big Smile

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PostSubject: Re: The world is a cemetery   Mon Mar 25, 2013 12:05 pm

moved to make room for new pinned!

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