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PostSubject: Ever Before Me   Tue Sep 06, 2011 10:20 am

"For your love is ever before me, and I walk continually in your truth." -Psalm 26:3 (NIV)

I have had a concept for a collection of songs in my mind for a while, based upon some scripture I'd been reading. I had the title for this song "Ever Before Me" in my mind but was having difficulty writing the words to correctly convey the thought I intended. The chorus was just me singing the phrase "your love is ever before me" over and over to a simple chord progression. Then I heard about Bethany Beckett. On October 25th, 2010, Bethany passed away, one day before she would turn 24. Her and Duncan had been married only 4 and a half months. Duncan was a friend of mine but since he had been called to be a missionary in Mexico with his wife, I had never had the opportunity to actually meet his wife. When I heard of her passing this verse came immediately to mind and I began to pen the words to this song.


Ever Before Me

Another day and a flow of tears
comes pouring from my eyes.
My hands are raised as the plan I'd planned
is taken from my life.
The overwhelming flood of peace
comes as you draw me nigh.
Remove the pain, the hurt, the pride;
the broken heart inside.

Your love is ever before me.
Your love is ever before me.
Your love is ever before me.
Your love is ever before me.


What happens when the trials come,
the mockery and scorn.
The things of life are ripped away,
my heart inside me torn.
Fiery darts are thrown my way,
His armour remains strong.
A shield of love surrounding me
and this is my song.

Your love is ever before me.
Your love is ever before me.
Your love is ever before me.
Your love is ever before me.

Your love is ever before me.
Your love is ever before me.
Your love is ever before me.
Your love is ever before me.
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PostSubject: Re: Ever Before Me   Tue Sep 06, 2011 5:28 pm

A very moving piece. I love it. It feels very sincere. There was only one thing that stood out to me. In the third line where plan is repeated:
My hands are raised as the plan I'd planned
It might sound different to music, but it doesn't flow as well in print. Perhaps replacing one of them with a synonym might work. For example:
My hands are raised as the course I'd planned
or
My hands are raised as the plan I'd devised
organized
contrived
shaped
designed
Just a suggestion. God Bless!

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PostSubject: Re: Ever Before Me   Wed Sep 07, 2011 8:44 am



a rough recording I did a while ago on my ipod haha, i'm trying to get my "in-home studio" finished so I can get a better quality recording.
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PostSubject: Re: Ever Before Me   Thu Sep 08, 2011 1:08 pm

I love the message of this song. May God continue to give you His voice and the inspiration by His Spirit to write more songs in Glory to Him. Amen.

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PostSubject: Re: Ever Before Me   Thu Sep 08, 2011 1:22 pm

I love that piece of scripture. Also reminds me of Act 2:25 "For David says concerning Him: 'I foresaw the LORD always before my face, For He is at my right hand, that I may not be shaken.

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PostSubject: Re: Ever Before Me   Thu Sep 08, 2011 1:41 pm

The music you have to accompany this is perfect!

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PostSubject: Re: Ever Before Me   Thu Sep 08, 2011 1:50 pm

An applause from me. Strong guitar playing to me and what a voice. Keep it up.

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