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PostSubject: Leviathan II   Sat Jan 14, 2012 11:43 am





A fierce battle rages
fish on!
the hook is set
taking line
spitting spray
from a screaming spool
of fishing line

he's runnin'
he's soundin'
he's winning
almost to the end of my rope
can i pull him back in time?

i think he's tiring
the line suddenly slack
tired of fighting
tired of running
there's now a crack
in my fighting chair

is he playing possum?

a sudden surge
the rod bends
the spool sings
signaling the fight is on again
bending almost to the point
of breaking

"a trial was set before you...
one such as is common to man"

you begin to understand
magnificent creature
full of passion and fire
heading in the wrong direction

sustenance readily provided
why are fish so easily distracted
so concerned with the artificial
with...
duh-bait
(debate)
that they don't see the hook
until it's too late?
so hard to turn

with a final surge
i call on Your strength
can You take some of the
Mercy and Grace
gifted to me
and give it to him?

i grip the rope firmly
and pull as hard as i can
the chair breaks!
i land flat on my back

eyes grow dim...
another blow to the head

a hallucination?
a dream?
a vision?

luminescent eel-like fish with wings?
got away
soars overhead...
swimming/flying?
Gracefully,
meanders twisting towards the sun

wafting on solar winds
trailing remnants of a broken net
irridescent, undulating, refracted light
streaming ribbonlike
phasing in and out
of reality

bursts into flames
airborne absurdity
suspended in ashen effigy
spreading it's wings
in one final effort
glimpse of a skeletal outline
before dissipating

cinders descend
upon the sea
this one didn't get away
and souls were saved
Christ's Hope
prevails...
over Satan's lines

the last thing i view...before everything goes...
black

My heart belongs to you,
My Heart,
"leaps inside me for you",
but this battle's frontline,
is being fought,
in guerilla warfare,
by devious terrorist tacticians,
in strongholds of the mind.





ISAIAH 14:12

How art thou fallen from heaven, O Lucifer, son of the morning! how art thou cut down to the ground, which didst weaken the nations!






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PostSubject: Re: Leviathan II   Sat Jan 14, 2012 3:23 pm

Now that's putting Matthew 4:19 into action, "Come, follow me," Jesus said, "and I will make you fishers of men." It made me read several times. Beautiful piece. Love this:

bursts into flames
airborne absurdity
outlined momentarily
in ashen effigy
before dissipating
spreading it's wings
in one final effort
ashes descend
upon the sea

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PostSubject: Re: Leviathan II   Sat Jan 14, 2012 5:15 pm

Fish, so prevalent in HIS work huh. Great Job, loved this line so much:

sustenance readily provided
why are fish so easily distracted
so concerned
with duh-bait
that they don't see the hook
so hard to turn?

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PostSubject: Re: Leviathan II   Sat Jan 14, 2012 5:29 pm

i was an avid fisherman never even realized how close He was to me the whole time i was out on the ocean fishing. i was being reeled in...ironic? i was soooo blind!!
duh...as in why didn't i get it sooner
duh..bait as in preoccupied with debating theology and not living in Christ
duh...bait as in literally taking satan's bait

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PostSubject: Re: Leviathan II   Sat Jan 14, 2012 7:44 pm

Very Nice poem:)
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PostSubject: Re: Leviathan II   Sat Mar 03, 2012 2:10 pm

got another piece of this puzzle today in a radio sermon by J. Vernon Mcgee, understood this piece much better though not yet fully.

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PostSubject: Re: Leviathan II   Sat Mar 03, 2012 4:58 pm

It seems a lot more cohesive now. Love, love, love it!

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PostSubject: Re: Leviathan II   Sat Mar 03, 2012 5:35 pm

oh...the revision is old, i just added the quote, the sermon explained part of it to me...pretty cool.

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PostSubject: Re: Leviathan II   Sat Mar 03, 2012 5:49 pm

For some reason, I thought the first battle part was new. It's been a little while since I last read this one. I'm glad I got to read it again. It's a great one!

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PostSubject: Re: Leviathan II   Wed Feb 20, 2013 8:15 am

understood a bit more today...

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PostSubject: Re: Leviathan II   Sat Sep 03, 2016 4:05 pm

DOUBLE B.P.S.

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