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PostSubject: Mugsy   Sun Dec 04, 2011 8:58 pm




Treading water
suspended by swirling motions
propelling, displacing
heavenly immersion
almost weightless

Float this liferaft
upon a tranquil sea

The sound of my own breathing
lulling me to sleep

This was peace
this was joy
sunshine on my face
I remember now

Smell of sun tan lotion
and salt air everywhere
seagulls flying overhead
diamonds sparkling
on lazy swells
sounds of outboard motors
muffled by ears submerged
soothing in a way

This memory
this gift
to relive for a moment
to experience once more
was completely gone before now
Erased by a broad sweep
along with many others

I can almost hear
my old pal mugsy
I raised from a pup
barking excitedly by the shore

did you dig up another sandcrab buddy?

The last one made you sick.

One at a time please Lord
just one at a time
Please don't think
that I'm not grateful

it's just...

my heart...

is breaking.




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PostSubject: Re: Mugsy   Mon Dec 05, 2011 11:19 pm

Wow, there is so much to love about this one, the strong emotion, the use of water to produce that emotion is done exceptionally.

Treading water,
suspended by swirling motions,
propelling, displacing,
heavenly immersion,
almost weightless.

Float this liferaft,
upon a tranquil sea.

The sound of my own breathing,
lulling me to sleep.

This was peace,
this was joy,
sunshine on my face,
I remember now.

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PostSubject: Re: Mugsy   Thu Dec 08, 2011 3:56 am

Many paintings don't have the visuals that your words have.

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PostSubject: Re: Mugsy   Wed Feb 01, 2012 6:57 am

thank you

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PostSubject: Re: Mugsy   Wed Jun 10, 2015 10:44 pm

faint

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